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okay here's Curriguy's TSHIRT attempt...

and I figured I'd show you all to see what you guys thought.

first of all, the concept:

1) I drew a "cartoon" bree because it kinda goes with the theme of blurred reality and fiction.

2) I chose NOT to put in a tagline because I think it makes a bigger impact this way....it leaves you thinking "what is THAT all about?" and in all likelihood...someone will come up to you and ask "what's with the shirt?"

3) ideally it'd be on a black Tshirt...because it's something guys AND girls can wear

4) the image/symbol will be centered on the chest

here it is:
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so what do you think?
what should I change?

does it look good at all?
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Post by PushedButton »

I commend your efforts. If I was to make one suggestion it would be that her expression isn't very 'Bree'.
Bree has a multitude of facial expressions and quirks that you could try to get in there - rather than trying to make her look more real - maybe that silly little noddy-grinny thing she does.
I dunno, just an idea, but I know it's hard to put into practice.
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I like the idea a lot.
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Post by Anduviel »

I agree, it really isn't the expression that says it all about her...this could be any fictional girl really.

But it's awesome looking! You're a very good artist.

I would recommend an expression that most reminds people of bree/and or her trademark expression you know?

But kudos on the whole cartoon idea!
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Very good, but I agree with the others. It needs some more expression. That little emotional touch of Bree, you know?
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hmm good point, I'll change it so that she's smiling!

haha, I cant believe I forgot to to do that
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Post by curriguy »

btw, I should note that the image above, in some browsers, has been resized automatically by the forum...

if you click on the picture...you'll see she actually DOES have a little more facial expression than you think.
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Post by livelongandprosper77 »

Very creative 8) hehe nice to see something so different and unique. I do tend to agree with you a slogan or line may take away from it. I do have a suggestion though i wouldn't mind seeing you or someone do a really good design of Bree with her Aussie hat on i love that hat haha. :wink:
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Post by DontHaveAClue »

I really like the concept. This is really good. However, to be perfect, i would go with the others and say Breed needs some typical facial expression. (ok, easy to say). But really, it's one of the best I've seen so far. And it doesn't need a slogan at all I think. The slogan is the "play" button. It speaks by itself. Very good job!!!

edit: I'm impressed. I would actually buy that T-shirt!

edit2: no, that IS the best. If you put the Play button on top of the drawing. It's a killer. You get my vote!
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Post by GertrudeBeast »

Ah, so someone else beat me to the drawn-over-cartoony-style... here's my rough draft, what do you folks think about the concept/layout?

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curriguy, you got her eyebrows perfectly!
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Post by Scrawnyfish »

Kasdeja wrote:curriguy, you got her eyebrows perfectly!
I was thinking the same thing!
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i wish i was this creative :(
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